Well done, Jersey! You did a very good job because you have explained two things that had happened. There are some mistakes like:
The conjunction at the start of a sentence in paragraph one
Capital letter for the species Barn owl
Maybe underline the title
This was amazing , it was so informative but near the end you could have written your bird profile in sentences instead of bullet points but everything else was perfect .
Well done, Jersey! You did a very good job because you have explained two things that had happened. There are some mistakes like:
The conjunction at the start of a sentence in paragraph one
Capital letter for the species Barn owl
Maybe underline the title
but it’s ok!
thanks els
Very good but you could put more information about the birds but apart from that every think else was fine
This was amazing , it was so informative but near the end you could have written your bird profile in sentences instead of bullet points but everything else was perfect .
thanks ben
It was brilliant and good but you need to work on writing a bit more.