This was amazing because after reading your blog I knew what a bird needs and what some Falconry terms mean ,but near the end it was hard to read because it wasn’t written in full sentences .
It was brilliant because you told what they eat and about the 2 day.
But you forgot a capital letter at the start of your sentence but the bit about did you know about carnivores didn’t make sense.
I think its all right but there is not a lot of information but you do tell us what a bird needs and to take it to the vet if its not well . Make sure it make’s sense. 🙂
It was brilliant because you had excellent description about the birds and what they need. You need to go back and check for spelling mistakes, for example deagle.
It was really good but when you are editing you could check with your spellings, capital letters and make sure it makes sense. After all that well done.:)
I did love reading this Hollie, but some sentences didn’t make sense, go back and check it. I now know what some terms meant in Falconry and what birds need.
This was amazing because after reading your blog I knew what a bird needs and what some Falconry terms mean ,but near the end it was hard to read because it wasn’t written in full sentences .
I enjoy reading you blog because good description and good paragraph and descriptions.
It was brilliant because you told what they eat and about the 2 day.
But you forgot a capital letter at the start of your sentence but the bit about did you know about carnivores didn’t make sense.
It was brilliant but you need to type in sentences well done BY KAITLYN
I think its all right but there is not a lot of information but you do tell us what a bird needs and to take it to the vet if its not well . Make sure it make’s sense. 🙂
It was brilliant because you had excellent description about the birds and what they need. You need to go back and check for spelling mistakes, for example deagle.
It was really good but when you are editing you could check with your spellings, capital letters and make sure it makes sense. After all that well done.:)
I did love reading this Hollie, but some sentences didn’t make sense, go back and check it. I now know what some terms meant in Falconry and what birds need.
Good job!