It was amazing because anyone who reads it will know what we did that day, it showed lots of information but consider checking for sense. ( e.g. Sharon asked us to completed a worksheet) well done Ben.:)
I now know this information about the birds and the way you put it was marvellous but you could of put which company she worked for, because that would boost the amazingness of this blog which would be impossible because its so fabulous. Impressively, all of the vocabulary was really excellent because there was improved vocabulary which would not be in a thesaurus because it is so amazing , but you could add some adverbial phrases for cohesion inside of your paragraph and you could also use a bit more parenthesis.
Gosh , I did not think my blog was this wonderful , I love your comment, how it wasn’t all positive you gave some constructive criticism to work on . thank you so much .
I enjoyed reading your blog as the description was really good , the use of parenthesis was fabulous. It made sense and if I wasn’t there I would have known what happened on that day. The vocabulary was good as well.
Your blog is very descriptive and you have written a lot of information about the day ,which is brilliant. You have written plenty about the activities and how you have described it, is amazing. Your facts explain a lot about what had happened and would help people if they weren’t there for it. I would check through your blog and see if there are any spelling mistakes or if it doesn’t make sense. For example After that, Sharon asked us to ‘completed’ a worksheet.
Well done, Ben! I really enjoyed it because most people didn’t write about the dissecting and that was my favourite. Also, check the sentence with Sharon asked us to completed a worksheet.
really instread and really good punctuation I was very happy to read your amazing work you have done well-done ben .L from Hollie .
It was amazing because anyone who reads it will know what we did that day, it showed lots of information but consider checking for sense. ( e.g. Sharon asked us to completed a worksheet) well done Ben.:)
Thank you for the amazing feedback , and the constructive criticism , you made me spot my mistake so thank you .
I now know this information about the birds and the way you put it was marvellous but you could of put which company she worked for, because that would boost the amazingness of this blog which would be impossible because its so fabulous. Impressively, all of the vocabulary was really excellent because there was improved vocabulary which would not be in a thesaurus because it is so amazing , but you could add some adverbial phrases for cohesion inside of your paragraph and you could also use a bit more parenthesis.
Gosh , I did not think my blog was this wonderful , I love your comment, how it wasn’t all positive you gave some constructive criticism to work on . thank you so much .
I enjoyed reading your blog as the description was really good , the use of parenthesis was fabulous. It made sense and if I wasn’t there I would have known what happened on that day. The vocabulary was good as well.
Thank You for the amazing comment , it made me feel very proud of my work so thank you .
Well done Ben ;D Next time add fronted adverbials
Your blog is very descriptive and you have written a lot of information about the day ,which is brilliant. You have written plenty about the activities and how you have described it, is amazing. Your facts explain a lot about what had happened and would help people if they weren’t there for it. I would check through your blog and see if there are any spelling mistakes or if it doesn’t make sense. For example After that, Sharon asked us to ‘completed’ a worksheet.
Well done, Ben! I really enjoyed it because most people didn’t write about the dissecting and that was my favourite. Also, check the sentence with Sharon asked us to completed a worksheet.
Over all, it was excellent!
Thank you for your comment , it was amazing . Your comment helped me too fix some mistakes I made in my blog, so thank you .