A great start Chloe. 🙂
Could you rewrite the middle section and let the reader know a bit more about the story dilemma.
Think about the following questions:
Why had you [Chloe] gone down to the sea?
How had the mermaid got her tail stuck?
What problems were there in trying to save her – how did you resolve them?
A great start Chloe. 🙂
Could you rewrite the middle section and let the reader know a bit more about the story dilemma.
Think about the following questions:
Why had you [Chloe] gone down to the sea?
How had the mermaid got her tail stuck?
What problems were there in trying to save her – how did you resolve them?